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May 23rd, 2003, 01:34 AM
#1
A poem by me...
Hey all--
For an english project we have to write a whole bunch of poetry and sorting through there's one that I really like that I wrote and I'd really like to share it...
My Future
I’ll never go back.
As I walk away it hits me,
I’ll never go back.
I turn my back,
as I walk away.
Now I look ahead of me,
and I see my future self.
I know my future self,
I already knew my future self.
Now that I see it,
I step through to be it.
Stepping through, just ahead of me.
It will be hard though, being the best.
A mixed breed of emotions consumes me,
as I wonder…
Are my ideals and thoughts good enough?
Good enough to change the world in a positive way?
As I watch these adolescent fourteen year old,
geniuses excel in every aspect of life.
They walk down the aisle,
with their big books and heavy heads.
What will become of them?
What will become of you?
What will become of me?
What do ya think eh??? I know I have no future in literature and frankly I don't want to begin one lol, but still I thought it was cool enough to share...
What are your thoughts?
--Peace
The real question is not whether peace can be obtained, but whether or not mankind is mature enough for it...
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May 23rd, 2003, 01:48 AM
#2
Junior Member
Yea, Nice poem, I know and hope you get an A+. Thanx for sharing it with us.
Poof, Bye, .:|Mymx|:.
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May 23rd, 2003, 01:51 AM
#3
Hey not bad, although i must admit i dont know much about poem's. You did better than i could of, i would have just made all the sentences rhyme.
Anyway i hope you get an A on your project.
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May 23rd, 2003, 02:56 AM
#4
most of my poetry starts with there once was a man from nantuckette but its kinda cool. Depressing but cool. I hope you get a good grade on that. you deserve it. at least its not like some peotery you here. I heard on the radio this guy (and he was freakin serious) who wrote a poem about an appricott. how much can u say about an appricott?
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May 23rd, 2003, 07:46 PM
#5
Cool I'm glad you guys like it... I wrote it at first thinking it was going to be just about graduating from high school, but then it spiraled out into a myriad of other topics. It's kind of like a bunch of feelings into one, when I first read it through after writing I was thinking... "What the...?" but it turned out all right. Thanks for the input all!
The real question is not whether peace can be obtained, but whether or not mankind is mature enough for it...
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May 23rd, 2003, 10:11 PM
#6
it's awful...
full of cliche's
horrible rythm...
i think you are trying too much...
and you are repeating yourself... achhhh ...
forget it
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