lol, whitehat your missing a 4 :P

Umm...the intro sounds a little bit too...choppy... 'Computer forensics are, etc etc etc.', that doesn't flow...

Try something like "The world of computerized networking has grown at a vast rate in the last 50 years since it was first implimented. Now, the internet is almost of a new world, and in this world, there is good and bad. The good outweighs the bad some people say..but still, as any community grows there is a need for control and policing. If there wasn't then the community would be in an uproar. One of the tools used by this Police force, is network and computer forensics. Not only is this a safe way to keep the criminals at bay, it's the most effective science for investigation we've come across since the old days of ARPAnet. To combat the wrong doings of the internet, computer forensics has many flavors, but most of all, network and computer forensics is the science of monitoring several computer logs, bundles of software and hardware, and overall communication between every circuit in a computerized environment to determine what, exactly, went wrong. Computer forensics is not only an asset to this community, but it's much needed. Today, it's used to not only prevent future occurences of a crime taking place, but monitor the events of the computer underworld, to know exactly what happened, and when it did, so we can patch ourselves from another occurence. First off i'll go in depth with how computer forensics works.."....etc etc etc.

You sound too choppy in your words..just something i've noticed..dunno if thats what u were goin for but ya..people like flow more then choppy facts as i've seen. Just my 2c.